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Write about the following topic. As Earth runs out of natural resources, we have started to look to space for solutions. However, some people argue that this is the wrong thing to do, and instead we should look for alternative solutions here on Earth. To what extent do you agree with them? What alternatives might there be to exploiting space for natural resources? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Evidently that nowadays we already have a lack of various fossil
fuels
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.
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, some individuals argued that we need to start findings
of
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new natural
resources
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 somewhere in space.
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, other people reckon that we need to find resolutions for
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 problem on Earth
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 of discovering and finding space. Looking from my perspective I agree with both opinions. So in
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essay
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 I will
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 examine
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 thought-provoking question. On the one hand, today we should be concerned about a lack of all natural
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 and of
course
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 we need to try to solve
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 problem.
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 with,
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, we need to
try
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 refuse all products which are made of some of
particular
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 endangered
resources
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, oil. We can stop using
patrol
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 for cars and replace our patrol cars with electricity.
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, we can recycle ,
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, plastic things like bottles, cups, packets and so on.
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, starting to mine different
resources
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on
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 our universe
it
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is a great idea. The first and easiest way is to start to explode meteorites and in debris try to find fossil
fuels
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, nations can bring together and create special teams which will mine natural
resources
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 on planets.
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 on Mars.
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, all these explorations and findings of fossil
fuels
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 need a tremendous amount of money.
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,
to transport
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 all these
resources
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 will be problematic too. In conclusion,
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 we need to reduce the usage of all fossil
fuels
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 on our planet.
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, we need to recycle already used
iteams
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items
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, we can try to launch organisations ions and companies which will try to mine all fossils on other planets
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