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In some cultures, older people are valued most highly. In other cultures, youth is valued more than experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion as to which age should be most valued.

#cultures #people #youth #age
Respecting elders is considered
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a responsibility of individuals in
few
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a few
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 nations
whereas
in
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 other countries,
value
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the value
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 of adults is far
important
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more important
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 than the old-age
people
.
This
 essay will discuss both viewpoints and I strongly believe that elders should be respected more than adults as they can provide us
a
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lot of experience
about
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the
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life
. To commence with, the humans who believe that working individuals should be encouraged more is because they are considered as the future of the country. To elaborate, adults work hard in different fields have
the
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 abundance of resources in the community
as well as
to
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make the
life
 of their loved-ones more easier in terms of having enough food and other necessities of
life
.
In addition
, a survey conducted in the USA (United States of America) revealed that 80
percent
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 of their
youth
 is working to make the nation successful like providing enough resources
to
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people
 to eat. In
this
 way,
youth
 should be
honored
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honoured
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 more for their
hard-work
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hard work
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.
However
, I strongly believe that old-age
people
 should be respected more as they can provide a lot of knowledge about
the
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life
 with their experiences. To elaborate, they used to have more information regarding
of
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how to spend monthly income on
the
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things so that
life
 can be easily managed in terms of money needed to buy sources to eat and to have some savings for
the
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future use. To exemplify, In India, it is considered
as
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a norm to give respect to their elder as they are supposed to be the head of
family
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the family
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 who
run
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 it and
on
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 the same time teach their children how to manage things in
the
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life
 with their experiences.
As a result
, in some
cultures
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 old-age
people
 are more valuable. In conclusion,
Although
youth
 is considered
as
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the future of
nation
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the nation
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due to
it's
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hard-work
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hard work
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, I strongly believe that older human beings should be respected more as they can teach the
youth
 about the facts of
life
 with their experiences.
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