Some people say music is the best way to bring people of different ulture and ages together.To what extent do you agree or disagree

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I still remember when I was a child, I was watching Michael Jackson's concert on television singing his original song "Heal The World" as a way to tell people all around the globe to stop the war. Aside from admiring his beautiful voice, I was actually blown away by the concert since I could see people from different races and backgrounds gathered around and singing together. That was my first time (and never the
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) to believe in the power of music, uniting people, and making the world to be a better place.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Universal language
  • Cultural barriers
  • Shared experience
  • Social cohesion
  • Harmony
  • Synergy
  • Melody and rhythm
  • Musical genres
  • Emotional resonance
  • Cultural exchange
  • Intergenerational
  • Solidarity
  • Musical heritage
  • Concerts and festivals
  • Collective identity
  • Diversity
  • Inclusivity
  • Music aficionado
  • Cross-cultural
  • Music streaming platforms
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