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the pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of fairmont island, according to a servey of visitors.

the pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of fairmont island, according to a servey of visitors.
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The provided pie charts illustrate the tourist's survey of Fairmount
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island
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 for the four common pros and cons.
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, it can be observed from the charts that the first common advantage is the local people on the
island
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,
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 the main disadvantage is the high cost of living.
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 with, it can be seen that 45% of total visitors think that
the
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Fairmount
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island
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 has
high
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 cost of living,
while
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other
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 30% feel that it is lack entertainment sources.
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, there are 20% of visitors believe that weather on the
island
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 a disadvantage, followed by food quality, at 5%. Moving on to the advantages, people and scenery on the
island
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 are considered as
top
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 two common advantages, accounting for 40%, and 37% of
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 respectively. In
additions
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, approximately 30% in
combine
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 of interviewees believe that culture ( 12%) and good accommodation ( 11%) are advantages of
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island
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 as well.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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