the pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of fairmont island, according to a servey of visitors.

the pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of fairmont island, according to a servey of visitors.
The provided pie charts illustrate the tourist's survey of Fairmount
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for the four common pros and cons.
Overall
, it can be observed from the charts that the first common advantage is the local people on the
island
,
whereas
the main disadvantage is the high cost of living.
To begin
with, it can be seen that 45% of total visitors think that
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Fairmount
island
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has
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cost of living,
while
other
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30% feel that it is lack entertainment sources.
Furthermore
, there are 20% of visitors believe that weather on the
island
is
also
a disadvantage, followed by food quality, at 5%. Moving on to the advantages, people and scenery on the
island
are considered as
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two common advantages, accounting for 40%, and 37% of
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respectively. In
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, approximately 30% in
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of interviewees believe that culture ( 12%) and good accommodation ( 11%) are advantages of
this
island
as well.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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