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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate how many
electricity
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 units are produced using fuel in
Australia
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 and
France
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 in 1980 and 2000
also
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
electricity
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 units in
France
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 doubled in 2000
according to
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 1980
while
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 it raised in
Australia
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 by 70%. The main source of
electricity
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 in
Australia
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 in both studied years was coal whilst it was nuclear power in
France
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. In more detail, in 1980 the basic resource to produce
electricity
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 in
Australia
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 was coal which presented the half of others. The next one was
hydropower
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 and natural
gas
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 with an equal proportion of fifth.
Last
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 but not least was
oil
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 with 10%.
Furthermore
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, the situation was different after twenty years as the whole creation increased from 100 to 170. The base resource was still coal with 130 rations and
hydropower
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 came next with 36, and
finally
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oil
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 and
gas
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 with the same ratio which was 2. In
France
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 in the first year, it took 25 coal and 25
gas
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 with 20
oil
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 and 15 nuclear
while
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 the
hydropower
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 was 5 to produce 90 electric units. The state differed in 2000 as the creation was multiplied to 180 ones using 126 nuclear power and 25 of both
oil
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 and coal with 2 of both
hydropower
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 and
gas
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, australia, france, hydropower, gas, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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