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Essay topics: The table above shows data on the demographics of four nations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics: The table above shows data on the demographics of four nations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table given, shows statistical data about population, individual earnings and average
life
expectancy
 in 4 different countries.
Overall
,
UK
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the UK
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 has the smallest population but with the highest
life
expectancy
. Regarding incomes,
USA
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the USA
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record
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records
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 the biggest value per
chapta
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capita
, but it can be noticed that
life
expectancy
 there,
it
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apply
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is the minimum one. It can be clearly observed that China has the greatest number of people, around 1 million 3
hundreds
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hundred
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. Ranked
on
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in
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the
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apply
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second place is
USA
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the USA
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 with nearly three
hundreds
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hundred
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 of
thousands
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thousand
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, and
UK
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the UK
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 with no more than 64
millions
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million
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. Individual earnings
places
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place
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china
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China
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on
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in
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 the
last
 position, with an
avergae
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average
 of 6,807
usd
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USD
 per
chapta
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capita
. The highest incomes are in
USA
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the USA
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, roughly 5300.
Average
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The average
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life
expectancy
 is around 70 years old in
china
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China
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 and
russia
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Russia
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. Uk citizens live around 81.5 years, they
havinng
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having
 the greatest
life
 span from the table,
while
USA
habitants
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habitats
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 are in
oppposition
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opposition
 with 69.2
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, expectancy, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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