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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following illustration depicts the number of tourists that went to
the
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various
areas
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,
such
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 as the coast, the mountains and the lakes in European countries between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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, we can observe
upward
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an upward
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 trend in each destination. The least
amount
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 of
people
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 in 1987 visited the lakes which was only 10
thousand
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people
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, and the highest
amount
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 of
people
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 in 2007 visited the coast which was more than 70
thousand
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visitors
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. In 1987 the least popular destination was the lakes, but after 1987, we can see
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase until 1997.
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, after the sharp rise which started in 1997 and lasted till 2002, we can observe a sharp decrease. The
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amount
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 of
visitors
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 fell from more than 70
thousand
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people
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 to 50
thousand
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people
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. The mountains in 1987 visited only 20
thousand
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people
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. There are some small fluctuations in the number of
visitors
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 to
this
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 destination, but
generally
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 we can observe an upward trend.
This
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 area in
the
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European countries reached a peak of approximately 35
thousand
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people
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 in 2007. The coast was one of the most popular
areas
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 for recreation from 1987 until 2007.
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, coastal
areas
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 lost
its
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 popularity from 1997 until 2002,
but
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after regained it. The least
amount
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 of
people
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 visited coastal
areas
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 in Europe in 1992. But after we can see a sharp increase which lasted until 2007.
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 the increase the coastal
areas
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 reached a peak of about 75
thousand
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visitors
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 in 2007.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, amount, people, thousand, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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