The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following illustration depicts the number of tourists that went to
the
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various
areas
,
such
as the coast, the mountains and the lakes in European countries between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
, we can observe
upward
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an upward
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trend in each destination. The least
amount
of
people
in 1987 visited the lakes which was only 10
thousand
people
, and the highest
amount
of
people
in 2007 visited the coast which was more than 70
thousand
visitors
. In 1987 the least popular destination was the lakes, but after 1987, we can see
gradual
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a gradual
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increase until 1997.
However
, after the sharp rise which started in 1997 and lasted till 2002, we can observe a sharp decrease. The
amount
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of
visitors
fell from more than 70
thousand
people
to 50
thousand
people
. The mountains in 1987 visited only 20
thousand
people
. There are some small fluctuations in the number of
visitors
to
this
destination, but
generally
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we can observe an upward trend.
This
area in
the
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European countries reached a peak of approximately 35
thousand
people
in 2007. The coast was one of the most popular
areas
for recreation from 1987 until 2007.
Although
, coastal
areas
lost
its
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popularity from 1997 until 2002,
but
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after regained it. The least
amount
of
people
visited coastal
areas
in Europe in 1992. But after we can see a sharp increase which lasted until 2007.
Due to
the increase the coastal
areas
reached a peak of about 75
thousand
visitors
in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, amount, people, thousand, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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