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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph shows the average
sallary
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salary
 for four different professions at their
debutance
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debutante
debutants
debutant
 and after three years,
while
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 the table illustrates the average working
hours
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 done weekly.
Overall
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, Underground Drivers have the highest income,
nurse
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nurses
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 being in opposition with the lowes one.
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, Firefighters spend the greatest number of
hours
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 at
work
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 per week. Nurses and policemen gain in their first year of
work
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, 1800 and 2100 pounds. After three years,
Police
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the Police
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recive
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received
 with 2000 pounds more, and nurses just
with
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apply
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1000. Firefighters
recive
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receive
 roughly double than previous two jobs, but the highest
payed
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paid
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work
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 remains
Underground
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the Underground
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 Driver who gains 5000 pounds when employees are hired and 5100 after three years of experience. Regarding
hours
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 of
working
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work
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, Firefighters are ranked
on
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in
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the
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apply
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first place with 55
hours
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 of
work
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,
being
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apply
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followed by Police with no more than 40. Underground drivers
work
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 the lowest number of
hours
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, just 36, being the most comfortable job.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, work with synonyms.
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