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Mobile phones and the Internet play an important role in the way people relate to one another socially. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The pie charts illustrate the main social networks for
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 in Scotland,England and Wales in 2010 and predicted numbers for 2018.
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Facebook
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 had the biggest market share in 2010 followed by
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 and
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pinterest
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.It is predicted that
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 to be dominant in 2018 and
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 will be a significant one with only a slight decrease in numbers.
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 and others will fall to minimal levels. In 2010,
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 had approximately half of the
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 being the second with 18.33% of British
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,
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 had about 16.95%
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 .Google Plus and Bebo were the least-used networking sites being used by 10.42% and 8.17% of Britishers respectively.
Facebook
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 is set to become the biggest site with nearly three-quarters of the total market by 2018.
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 will decline by a slight percentage in usage but continue to be the significant website with about 17.39%
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,
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 market share will decrease by almost 10 per cent from 16.955 to 7.25% in 2018.Google Plus will be one-fifth of the size in 2010.Bebo will simply disappear in 2018 even though it had about 8%
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 in 2010.
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