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All education, primary, secondary and further education, should be free to all people and paid for by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The article introduces the topic of whether Ansel Adames took the negatives. The writer lists three facts to support his argument,but the lecturer disagrees and attacks each of his claims made in the reading. At the same time,he points out that there are some flaws in the writer’s explanation. First,the writer says the distinctly shaped pine trees are consistent with the trees in A’s works.But the speaker contends that the trees are very popular at that time and acted as a landmark in
this
 park.
As a result
,many photographers came there to take some pictures of them. Second,
according to
 the writer, the handwriting on the envelope is very similar to the handwriting of A’s wife,V. The speaker,
on the other hand
, points out there are many mistakes in the spelling of names of places in
this
 park,so he feels that it’s by no means to take place on
such
 a woman who is very familiar with
this
 place because her father has a studio there.
Third,
the reading passage
also
 thinks there are some negatives that were broken by the fire in 1937. At the same time,A’ works
also
 suffered from a similar accident. The professor rebuts
this
 explanation and he climbs that the chemicals used in that period were easy to catch fire.So many photos from other photographers are burned , too.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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