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Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smart phone. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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There is a contentious belief in society that officials ought to fund
in
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railways
instead
 of
roads
. I utterly disagree with
this
 notion, as
such
 practice jeopardises drivers' life and escalates the traffic jam, leading to additional repercussions afterwards. Restraining the flow of money into road modernization is a dangerous choice.
That is
 to say that myriads of cars travel every day, and
therefore
, constant maintenance is needed to keep it that way. In fact, there are many more vehicles on the
roads
 in comparison with railways, and
hence
, a tremendous number of individuals would get hurt because of the budget scarcity to rectify road issues. As it was reported by scholars from Nazarbaev University, the most essential factor in car
accidents
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 prevention is the
roads
' quality, and
consequently
, nonchalance from the government regarding
this
 problem would be devastating for car owners' security.
Furthermore
, limiting investment leads to massive traffic jams, which generate numerous negative ramifications. To elaborate, the paucity of finance constrains the expansion of
roads
, which causes them to become overcrowded.
As a result
, the amount of greenhouse gas emissions skyrockets, resulting not only in environmental troubles but
also
 in the mitigation of longevity
due to
 the long exposure of residents to toxic substances.
For instance
, a small town named Aktau witnessed
unprecedented
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 rise in air pollution because of the shortage of
roads
 in certain neighbourhoods.
Overall
, the establishment must continue to spend money on
roads
 as it is essential to provide security and stabilise congestions, which specifically prevents a plethora of other issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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