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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.
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The chart below demonstrates how much local government spent on different categories
such
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Education
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, health care, pensions, defence, welfare,interest on borrowing, transport, culture and leisure and
other
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 in 2010 and 2015. Over the five-year period, the pie chart below had significant changes.
Overall
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education
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 had the highest percentage and transport, culture and leisure and
other
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 had the lowest in both
years
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.
Firstly
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,
education
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, healthcare, and pension were the biggest expenditures in both
years
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. The percentage of healthcare declined by 1% in 2015%, and
education
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 had a gradually bigger decrease by 3%.
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, pension did not change in both
years
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 (19%), same as other it remained the same throughout the
years
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.
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, in 2010 welfare made up 8% but by the year 2015, it got higher and accounted for 13%
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borrowing increased by 5% in 2015. Defences percentage was 17% in 2010, after that it declined to 14% in 2015. Culture, transport, and leisure dropped to just 1% in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • allocation
  • budget
  • fiscal
  • increased/decreased spending
  • percentage
  • funding
  • infrastructure
  • public services
  • education
  • healthcare
  • recreation
  • welfare
  • economic conditions
  • fiscal policy
  • trend
  • analysis
  • comparative
  • significant
  • allocate
  • reallocate
  • subsidize
  • cutbacks
  • deficit
  • surplus
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