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Some school leavers travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages for their studies?

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Recently, there has been a heated debate in the community about whether school leavers should go straight to
university
 or take a
gap
 year to travel or work for a
while
. In my opinion, both views have advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, working or travelling for a period of time
instead
 of going to
university
 directly can make those people more familiar with the working and living environment after graduation, and know the difficulties and hardships of making money, which can make them more enthusiastic about studying after entering
university
. And
students
 can
also
 take a
gap
 year to engage in some high-tech jobs so that they can know where their knowledge is lacking, so they can focus on learning the knowledge they are not good at after entering
university
.
On the other hand
,
students
 do not go to college directly but go to work or travel for a period of time, which will increase their time away from campus.
This
 will cause them a lot of trouble as they cannot adapt to campus life after they enter the
university
 campus. They cannot focus on their studies and life, which may prevent them from passing exams or graduating. And bad habits developed during previous
gap
 years may make their studies difficult during college. In general, taking a
gap
 year
instead
 of going directly to college is
also
 an option for
students
.
Students
 need to weigh the pros and cons and make a decision that they will not regret.
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