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Many people today prefer to socialise online rather than spend time with friends in the local community. To what extent do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

#people #socialise #time #friends #community
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In recent days, there has been a heated discussion in society about whether
people
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 are more comfortable making
friends
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 online than in person. Some
people
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 think that making
friends
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 online is better,
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 others hold the opposite view. In my opinion, there are more benefits to making
friends
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 online than staying with real-life
friends
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. On the one hand, making
friends
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 on the Internet allows you to meet
friends
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 from all over the world. They can teach you about the culture and customs of different places, and even when you make
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 from other countries, you can learn their languages. In
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 way,
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 can gain more knowledge and broaden their horizons.
In addition
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, if you don't get
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 real
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, you can reduce your social
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 and reduce your money output, so making
friends
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 is more efficient and saves costs.
On the other hand
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,
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 would rather spend
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 on the Internet meeting new
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 than spend
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 with real
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 to develop bonds.
This
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 way,
people
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 have fewer opportunities for face-to-face communication. Online chatting mostly involves typing or voice chatting, which does not require many communication skills in real life.
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, communication skills may decline.
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, if you do not often meet and socialize with real
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, you may neglect your relationship with them, and the bond between you may not be as strong as it could be. In general, I support
people
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 spending more
time
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 on the Internet to meet new
people
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, so that the benefits outweigh the risks.
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