Nowaday, more and more people commit crimes. What are causes and solutions?

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myriad of

crime

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happened in society. We will discuss upcoming paragraphs what are problems and how to prevent them.

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development of technology

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there are many labour

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by machinery. People who are not

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, illegal activities are

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, another cause of many people engaging in criminal activities could be the popularity of the Internet. Especially children

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learnt inappropriate content

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movies or programs.

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type of thing

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negative

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effect on their mental development. To be more dangerous they may have

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what they watch on television or

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is a factor behind

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, several solutions can be

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issue.

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program to according the

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. Do not let them free. If everyone

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with their work so can be reduced criminal activities.

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, parents should be checked what kind of content

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by children. They have to overcome their kids to watch good movies or programs which

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not

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effect on their

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. In conclusion, many reasons can be given to explain why more and more people commit crimes and several actions that can be taken to control

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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