Nowaday, more and more people commit crimes. What are causes and solutions?

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happened in society. We will discuss upcoming paragraphs what are problems and how to prevent them.

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there are many labour

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by machinery. People who are not

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, illegal activities are

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by them for living.

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, another cause of many people engaging in criminal activities could be the popularity of the Internet. Especially children

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learnt inappropriate content

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movies or programs.

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effect on their mental development. To be more dangerous they may have

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what they watch on television or

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program to according the

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with their work so can be reduced criminal activities.

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, parents should be checked what kind of content

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by children. They have to overcome their kids to watch good movies or programs which

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effect on their

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. In conclusion, many reasons can be given to explain why more and more people commit crimes and several actions that can be taken to control

this

issue.

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Nowaday, more and more people commit crimes. What are causes and solutions?

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People talk about their money (how much they earn/how much they spend) in their daily lives. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative development?

Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people think that the government should spend more money on providing faster means of public transport. Some others think that there are important priorities(e.g.cost, environment). Discuss both views and give your opinion.