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You are getting married. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend to invite him/her to the wedding. In your letter - describe who you are going to marry, - tell what will happen on the wedding day (the schedule), - explain why it’s important him/her to be at the wedding.

Dear MK, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
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 letter to invite you to my Wedding
which
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, which
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 will
be taking
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take
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 place next month. I will be happy to have you that day.
as
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As
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 you know, my
boyfriend
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boyfriend,
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 Jone and I have been together for almost two years now, and we
finally
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 made up our minds to marry.
our
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Our
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 wedding ceremony will be held in August at the Wedding Hall. The party will start at 7 pm and finish at 11 pm, the first two hours will
tie
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be spent tying
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 the knot
and
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, and
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 my boyfriend will offer me gold, and
then
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 in the
last
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 hour we will take some photos and dance together. And
lastly
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, we will eat and
goodby
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our
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to our
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 families. It will be very important for me to have you
that
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there that
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day
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day,
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 as you are my best friend
and
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, and
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 I want you to join me during the happiest moment in my life
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, and
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 certainly to take photos together. Looking forward to seeing you. Best regards Iman

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organization
Use clear plan in the letter. Put one idea in each paragraph and keep the order: greeting, invite, about the person, schedule, why the friend should come, closing.
grammar
Fix word use and grammar. Capitalize the start of lines, names, and 'I'. Use simple, common words and short sentences.
clarity
Make the schedule clear. State the time and place as simple facts, not in a long line.
tone
The letter is polite and friendly.
content
It keeps the reader in mind by naming why the friend should come.
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