The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.

The bar chart compares the proportion of 4 divers transportations usage throughout the commuting to work in one of European city in 3 separate years 1960, 1980 and 2000. The unit is measured in the percentage.
The bar chart below displays, the
percentage
of 4 different kinds of
transportation
utilized by divers to approach their destination, in a European city through 3 different years 1960, 1980 and 2000. In 1960, the majority of
people
walked to work and other
people
used bikes, buses, or
cars
in order to get to their destinations. The
percentage
of
people
who used bikes,
cars
, buses and
people
who walked to their destinations, respectively is 26%, 18%, 5% and 34%, which again shows that most
people
preferred to walk. Twenty years later, in 1980, the proportions of
people
who walked and used their bike decreased slightly and respectively dropped to 17% and 20%.
Although
, the
percentage
of
people
who used their
cars
experienced a significant increase and jumped from 5% to 24%.
Furthermore
, the
percentage
of
people
who used the bus for
transportation
increased gradually by 7%. In 2000, the highest and lowest rate of transport modes belongs to car and bike respectively.
Furthermore
, we witness that the 3 types of
transportation
bus, foot and bike, fell steadily at 15%,9%, and 6% respectively. Meanwhile, the usage of
cars
ascended widely and reached a peak of 35%.
To sum up
, year by year the usage of vehicles and public
transportation
increased.
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