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Space exploration is a topic that is widely discussed these days. What are the advantages and disadvantages of space exploration?

These days, a lot of people
talking
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 about exploring the
space
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 in schools and
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 which is discussed wildly among people. Protecting our
planet
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 and environment from any harm from
space
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 and improving health care for our earth and
the
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humans.
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,
traveling
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 to
the
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space
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 is costly and
risk
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 to
astronauts
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sometime
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.
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 , one benefit of
space
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 exploration is protecting our
planet
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 from any unexpected boosters falling from
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space
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 .
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, discovering something new to
protects
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 our
environments
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such
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 as watching weather condition and observing how the
environed
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 survive
otherwise
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 we may receive any unexpected rocket or weather condition which can be harmful
for
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 our
planet
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 in order to avoid that , the governments are sending our
astronauts
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 to find out something new
such
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 as medicine or different
planet
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 to live on other than earth. Many
astronauts
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 had been there and always will come back with helpful information for
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society. These
befits
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 helped our
planet
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 in the past years.
In
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 the other hand , the cost of
traveling
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 to
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space
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 is too high as we can watch on
our
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 news , government propose two to three visit in a year
that
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 shows how costly
traveling
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 there
.
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 , coming back healthy not sure 100% , they do not
advice
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pregnants
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 to travel to
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space
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due to
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 the pressure and unknown disease
can
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 hit them
however
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astronauts
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 will go through hard training months before they go the
space
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 to
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unsure
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 that they are ready for it .
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 , in some
trips
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 the spaceplane can damage in the middle of
trip
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due to
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 machinal
issue
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 which
is
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can harm the people in it . In conclusion ,
while
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 our
planet
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 can
be benefits
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 from discovering
the
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space
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 , it
is
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also
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 brings harm to our
planet
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 due the human activities
on
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the
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space
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 .

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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