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the pie chart shows the shares of total world food consumption held by each of seven different food types in 2014

the pie chart shows the shares of total world food consumption held by each of seven different food types in 2014
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This
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 pie
chart
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 depicted information related to the
consumption
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 of
food
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 worldwide.
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, it has been seen that in 2014
world
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food
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consumption
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 of seven different
food
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 items namely vegetables, cereals, rice, bread, meat, fish, and fruits are consumed by the population in the
world
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.
Firstly
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, in
this
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 pie
chart
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, the major portion which is consumed in 2014 is meat which had almost around 31.4% of the major portion in the
chart
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.
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, in the
chart
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, the second most favourite eatable item is fish with a percentage of 27.9.
On the other hand
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, people all around the
world
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 prefer to eat cereals which is why cereals are on number third with almost around 11.7 per
cent
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.
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, vegetables retain 10.5 per
cent
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 of the
world
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food
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consumption
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chart
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 in 2014.
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, from
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 ,
chart
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 fruit
consumption
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 is at a modest level in percentage terms with 10.6 per
cent
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.
In contrast
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, in 2014 the figure for bread which is 5.5% showed that it is the least eatable item.
While
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 rice with 2.5 per
cent
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 stood as the lowest consumable
food
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 in 2014.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, consumption, food, world, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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