The maps below show the center of a small town called Birshire as it is now ,and plans for its development.

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The two maps illustrate how Birshire is planned to be developed.

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Birshire will have undergone a transformation from a rural town into an urbanized area in the future.There will have been significant in terms of removals, expansions, replacements, and additions. First and foremost all the farms of Birshire will have been removed in the future.Griffiths farm which is located in the northeast will have been replaced with the supermarket.Hoolahan farm will have been replaced with parking a lot,

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the farmer's market which is just next to Carbia Road will have been demolished. When we look at the map in detail,we can

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see other alterations that are worth noting.That street will be expanded to the west.The open field which is in the southeast will be the venue of construction for the sports centre.The public park will have remained untouched.On the west of the map,there will be additional houses . The shop will have been destroyed to erect more houses.

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The maps below show the center of a small town called Birshire as it is now ,and plans for its development.

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