Doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly. However, many of them do not get enough exercise. What are the reasons? What can be done to encourage them to exercise more?
Despite the doctors' recommendations a huge amount of old
people
do not get enough exercise. Lack
of Correct article usage
The lack
facilities
can be seen as a reason of
Change preposition
for
this
situation. They do not have enough state sports
centres also
they can not afford private ones. Governments can fix these problems with
increasing the number of Change preposition
by
sport
Change the noun form
sports
facilities
.
From my point of view, they do not do sports
because they face with lack
of facilities
. Old people
love place
Add an article
the place
which
they live. They do not want to go out of their Change preposition
in which
comfort
zone
. Therefore
places for exercising should be carried next to them. If they had have
places for exercising in their Unnecessary verb
apply
comfort
zone
they would not have to exit from their comfort
zone
. Also
they do not earn money because they do not work so they should spend their money carefully. It means that creating new Add a comma
,Also
facilities
is not enough alone also
these facilities
should be free for elder people
. For example
, my grandmother should do exercises, she realized that but she does not have opportunity
.
The most logical way to solve Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
lack
of Correct article usage
the lack
exercising
problem is increasing opportunities. It should be done by Wrong verb form
exercise
government
. Government should support companies Add an article
the government
to
giving discounts for private Change preposition
by
sports
centres such
as swimming pools, gyms, tennis courts and
etc. They can use discount cards for old Correct word choice
apply
people
. If it will be cheap or free old people
do not care money
. Change preposition
about money
As a result
of this
they can focus Add a comma
,this
exercising
. Change preposition
on exercising
Also
government should open new state Add a comma
,Also
sports
centres and it should be free for at least old people
. If it will happened old people
do not have to quit from
their Change preposition
apply
comfort
zone
. Thus
they encourage old people
who can not afford
. Like my grandmother.
In conclusion, Correct pronoun usage
itafford
although
doctors say that many of the old people
do not listen
them. They do not do enough exercise because of Add the preposition
tolisten
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
facilities
. Therefore
governments should increase the number of facilities
and they should set some sales in already opened private sports
halls.Submitted by yunussemreozkaya on
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