Doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly. However, many of them do not get enough exercise. What are the reasons? What can be done to encourage them to exercise more?

Despite the doctors' recommendations a huge amount of old
people
do not get enough exercise.
Lack
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The lack
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of
facilities
can be seen as a reason
of
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for
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this
situation. They do not have enough state
sports
centres
also
they can not afford private ones. Governments can fix these problems
with
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by
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increasing the number of
sport
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sports
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facilities
. From my point of view, they do not do
sports
because they face with
lack
of
facilities
. Old
people
love
place
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the place
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which
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in which
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they live. They do not want to go out of their
comfort
zone
.
Therefore
places for exercising should be carried next to them. If they had
have
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apply
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places for exercising in their
comfort
zone
they would not have to exit from their
comfort
zone
.
Also
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,Also
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they do not earn money because they do not work so they should spend their money carefully. It means that creating new
facilities
is not enough alone
also
these
facilities
should be free for elder
people
.
For example
, my grandmother should do exercises, she realized that but she does not have
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
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. The most logical way to solve
lack
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the lack
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of
exercising
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exercise
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problem is increasing opportunities. It should be done by
government
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the government
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. Government should support companies
to
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by
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giving discounts for private
sports
centres
such
as swimming pools, gyms, tennis courts
and
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apply
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etc. They can use discount cards for old
people
. If it will be cheap or free old
people
do not care
money
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about money
show examples
.
As a result
of
this
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,this
show examples
they can focus
exercising
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on exercising
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.
Also
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,Also
show examples
government should open new state
sports
centres and it should be free for at least old
people
. If it will happened old
people
do not have to quit
from
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apply
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their
comfort
zone
.
Thus
they encourage old
people
who can not
afford
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itafford
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. Like my grandmother. In conclusion,
although
doctors say that many of the old
people
do not
listen
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tolisten
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them. They do not do enough exercise because of
lack
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a lack
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of
facilities
.
Therefore
governments should increase the number of
facilities
and they should set some sales in already opened private
sports
halls.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivation
  • physical limitations
  • lack of time
  • fear of injury
  • exercise facilities
  • misunderstanding
  • benefits of exercise
  • social support
  • poor health conditions
  • awareness
  • appropriate exercises
  • guidance
  • financial constraints
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