The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is true that when it comes to how someone
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to live,
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from older generations have very traditional ideas about it.
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I agree that traditional ideas are outdated, there
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still valuable things from older
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. In
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essay, I will explain and give
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conclusion. On the one hand,
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from
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the old
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time
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is definitely less relevant to
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the younger
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generation at
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time. Back in
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,
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have to obtain
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education and shortly after that, they are hired
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company with fame and dignity,
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and worked
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there until their pension.
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, nowadays it doesn't matter individual
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not a
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degree when he or she can do their task. To cite an example,
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Tesla which is owned by Elon Musk, recently hired a
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boy who has
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great IT
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. In the second place, traditional roles of men and women, breadwinners and housewives,
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more accepted for young adults. Nowadays, they choose their role depending on their income and career opportunities.
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, there is still some beneficial piece of advice from grandparents. To be exact, some
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being
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honest, hardworking and respectful
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other
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are still helpful for
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for
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survive
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competitive universe. To put it another way, in our globalized world, young adults always need to contact and connect with
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from
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variety of
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backgrounds
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,
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being
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good
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manners
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and
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will surely become their advantage,
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, doing their best in
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the workplace
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will give
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further
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job promotion, an increase of income and so on.
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, BTS,
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a Korean
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boy band,
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worked more than 10 years for their debut and success with their true hard work and
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, now there are most famous band not only in Korea
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but
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in
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the
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worldwide. In conclusion, traditional
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views
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are not accepted by
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from
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generation
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also
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and also
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often seem incompatible,
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, we should not ignore all
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of
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them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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