We live in a world of technology these days. The internet brings with it clear advantages and disadvantages. Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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Technology is ruling over everyone's heart and mind these days.
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has brought a revolution in
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's lifestyle be it personal or professional. Certainly,
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development has its own merits and demerits. The same shall be envisioned in
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along with
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my opinion in the aforementioned paragraphs.
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with,
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the presence
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of hi-tech devices which operate through data connections has made
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no less than a global village. With a click of a mouse,
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can see what's happening in different parts of the world. In fact,
digitilization
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digitisation
has narrowed distances and enhanced connectivity on
personal
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a personal
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level as well.
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,
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years back before the device revolution, it was a herculean task to talk to
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's family abroad.
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, today's scenario has been flipped and interaction over video calls and chats gives a very
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close-knit
experience.
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,
advent
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the advent
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of
internet
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the internet
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has led to the comprehensive growth of an individual. Search engines like
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Google
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and
yahoo
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Yahoo
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has
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broadened
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's scope of thinking by enhancing intellectual skills. To elucidate,
smallest
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of the tasks can now be forecasted through the web like
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forecast, job openings and navigation.
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applications have made everyone's life
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smooth sail and comfortable. To explain
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, back in
1990s
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the 1990s
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when newspapers and radio channels were major media available, people had to travel
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to places
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for search of
job
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jobs
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.
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, today
one
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can think of exponential growth by
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utilising
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softwares
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software
wisely. On the flip side, overcrowding and
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expoitation
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exploitation
of branches of
internet
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the internet
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like social media
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made a man sort of slave. Youngsters, these days cannot imagine their life without gadgets. It has detrimental effects on
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's mental
as well as
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physcial
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physical
health.
According to
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a report, people who have more screen time are more prone to serious
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illnesses
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like melancholy, depression, anxiety, autism etc. To get deeper, too much presence of laptops and social connections have made people
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live a life which they can display as being extravagant. In the notion of
show-off
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, they are losing real bonds and meaningful relationships. To
consumate
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consummate
, to polish
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's personality, it's
indispensible
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indispensable
to upgrade
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's and make use of
latest
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the latest
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technology.
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, limited use of
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resources by equally being mindful of
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's values can bring
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positive outcomes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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