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Students should choose a university majo that prepares them for high-paying careers. To what extent do you agree with the statement?

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In the modern times of highly competitive work
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 and lucrative paying jobs,
people
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 are faced with a dilemma about career-path selection. Some
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 consider monetary benefits over career interests.
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, in my opinion, selecting
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 based on the expected pay is completely preposterous. Incoming university
students
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 are tempted to choose majors based on the prevalent market pay rates. A highly remunerating job will make an individual financially more stable than an average-paying job,
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,
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 tend to choose
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careers
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.
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, university attendees believe they will be able to pay student loans faster, than their counterparts and can quickly become debt-free.
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, it was seen that over 50 % of high-school graduates are considering Computer science majors owing to their high remuneration.
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, it's believed that
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 choose
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 as
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 pay.
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,
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 just choosing
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 based on pay is highly unreasonable in my opinion
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 numerous reasons. First and foremost, owing to their greed for money,
people
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 end up in a major which they don't seem to enjoy and eventually fail miserably in exams.
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, even after earning they don't feel excited and self-satisfied about the work they are performing.
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,
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 taking subjects just because of high pay in the future leads to lesser innovation and economic development of the nation.
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,
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 should consider their interests
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.
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 the monetary benefit of a particular career tempts one to choose a specific major,
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, taking
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 an approach is superfluous and should be dealt with carefully. In conclusion, I am of the strong opinion to follow one's interest and passion, as
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 can eventually take you to the top and be financially more secure.
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