how does the map describe the change of village park ?

The map compares the differences between village parks 10 years ago and the present.

It is clear that

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there are diversity changes and something added.

Overall

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, the picture illustrates after 10 years the village park has developed in some operations.

For example

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, nowadays there are picnic spaces, cafes, toilets, and cycling paths that there do not happen in the past.

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, the children's play field goes through expansion to become two sides children's play area and children's soft play space.

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, some area got improvement from some time in the past.

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, a car park that only for 20 capacities comes to 50 capacity for now, tennis courts

also

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have a wider area, and 10 years ago pond range go through a boating lake in present.

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this

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, in the past woods operation still has a large field but right now

this

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range is divided into a toilet, cafe, and woods field.

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how does the map describe the change of village park ?

Many people try to create a balance between their professional life and their personal life. However, very few are able to achieve such a balance. What problems stop people from achieving a work-life balance? How can these problems be overcome?

Wild animals have no place in 21th century, so protecting them is the waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People today are more concerned with owning material possessions than with developing friendships and family relationships. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.