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In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

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There is no doubt that in recent times,
due to
 lifestyle ,changes more
people
 are adapting to fast
food
 culture. I think the disadvantages of
this
habit
 outweigh the advantages since consuming junk
food
 regularly has many worse impacts on our
health
. In my essay below, I will
further
 discuss the many reasons and effects of
this
habit
.
Firstly
,
due to
 overpopulation and educational advancements, more
people
 are giving importance to their careers than their personal lives or
health
.
Due to
this
 reason, their lives are fast-moving and they prefer spending less time on cooking and other household chores. They get used to eating outside as it saves time and use mobile applications to order instant
food
.
This
 has led to the
habit
 of consuming fast
food
 more, and
hence
 fast
food
 industries are gaining more importance.
On the contrary
,
although
 it's a time-saver, in the long run,
this
 practice might have worse impacts on
health
. It's been noticed that many
people
 are suffering from harmful diseases
such
 as cancer, ulcer, etc.
due to
this
habit
. Not only in the long run but sometimes kids and
people
 who are allergic to some
food
 items may
also
 experience discomfort and
health
 issues
due to
 eating outside. The main reason is that the products used
while
 cooking these foods are of low quality and can affect one's
health
 in multiple ways. Personally, I have friends who recovered from cancer
due to
 the regular consumption of fast
food
.
Hence
, I believe it's an unhealthy
habit
 and its disadvantages outweigh the benefits. In conclusion, as mentioned above,
although
 having fast
food
 is fun and time-saving, it has negative impacts on
health
. So, we should cultivate the
habit
 of cooking in our homes often and reduce consuming fast
food
.
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