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In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

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There is no doubt that in recent times,
due to
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 lifestyle ,changes more
people
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 are adapting to fast
food
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 culture. I think the disadvantages of
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habit
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 outweigh the advantages since consuming junk
food
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 regularly has many worse impacts on our
health
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. In my essay below, I will
further
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 discuss the many reasons and effects of
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habit
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.
Firstly
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,
due to
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 overpopulation and educational advancements, more
people
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 are giving importance to their careers than their personal lives or
health
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.
Due to
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this
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 reason, their lives are fast-moving and they prefer spending less time on cooking and other household chores. They get used to eating outside as it saves time and use mobile applications to order instant
food
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.
This
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 has led to the
habit
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 of consuming fast
food
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 more, and
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 fast
food
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 industries are gaining more importance.
On the contrary
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,
although
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 it's a time-saver, in the long run,
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 practice might have worse impacts on
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. It's been noticed that many
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 are suffering from harmful diseases
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 as cancer, ulcer, etc.
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this
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habit
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. Not only in the long run but sometimes kids and
people
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 who are allergic to some
food
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 items may
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 experience discomfort and
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 issues
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 eating outside. The main reason is that the products used
while
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 cooking these foods are of low quality and can affect one's
health
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 in multiple ways. Personally, I have friends who recovered from cancer
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 the regular consumption of fast
food
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.
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, I believe it's an unhealthy
habit
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 and its disadvantages outweigh the benefits. In conclusion, as mentioned above,
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 having fast
food
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 is fun and time-saving, it has negative impacts on
health
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. So, we should cultivate the
habit
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 of cooking in our homes often and reduce consuming fast
food
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.
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