Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend, and propose some solutions you think would be effective.
Some evidence
seem
Change the verb form
seems
crime
would be rising in most countries. Especially between youth
. Youth
people
are in
a critical Change preposition
at
age
. The causes
of this
appear to be focused on two areas and the number of solutions appear to be effective.
It is often said that one
of the causes
of the crime
it
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
about
resection. If Change preposition
apply
people
can not pay their
daily routine , they will Change preposition
for their
crime
. Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
For example
, a man who does not pay his
girl’s school , Change preposition
for his
he
wants to Correct pronoun usage
apply
robber
money for her tuition. Replace the word
rob
One
the other hand , Correct your spelling
On
crime
also
appears to be rising among young people
. One
of the causes
of this
case of crime
it
is about Correct pronoun usage
apply
youth
people
are in
a critical Change preposition
at
age
. If parents
do not aware them
, they will Change preposition
of them
crime
easily. Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
Forinstance
, young Correct your spelling
For instance
people
in
Change preposition
at
these
Change the determiner
this age
these ages
age
are disobedient and they can do anything they want. And social media can impact on
them too.
Change preposition
apply
In
Change preposition
On
one
hand there has some solutions Correct article usage
the one
appear
to be effective. Correct pronoun usage
that appear
One
of this
solutions Correct determiner usage
these
it
is about helping Correct pronoun usage
apply
government
. Government has a huge role in Add an article
the government
people
’s life. Examples can be scen
in if government prepare his country for Correct your spelling
seen
the
better life , Correct article usage
a
crime
will be less. In
addition
another solution Add a comma
,addition
it
is about helping Correct pronoun usage
apply
parents
to
their young Change preposition
with
child
. Because young Fix the agreement mistake
children
people
are in
their critical Change preposition
at
age
and do not know what is good for them very well. In this
situation
if Add a comma
,situation
parents
do not have excellent behavior
with them , young Change the spelling
behaviour
people
will have distance with
their Change preposition
from
parents
. So parents
should be close with
their Change preposition
to
youth
. For
example
Add a comma
,example
parents
do not punishment
their child for everything.
In conclusion , it seems to me Replace the word
punish
crime
has a lot of causes
especially
in young Add the comma(s)
,especially
people
these days. There has some bad happening impact on crime
between people
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