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Some people belleve that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people belleve that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Sharing the data is the topic of discussion.
Although
 Some think that some
information
 should not release Freely because of its value, others, myself included, believe that it is essential to share info around the world. The first reason would be about our lives
due to
 living in a fast world in which everyone is too busy to care for each other.
For example
. the Covid pondamie situation happened a
while
 ago and by acknowledging the community and handing them a lot of knowledge, a majority of people saved their life. So, it is valuable to share
information
 to save their lives. The second one is about the awareness of the community around the globe because in
this
 case, the crowd informed themselves and prepare for everything that maybe one day happen.
For instance
, before autumn all the magazines and articles talk about N1H1 and how to care our bodies and which vaccine we need to take every year.
Hence
, the
information
 can level our awareness. Some may argue that
information
 should not be handed to everyone freely because society will not understand the value of data and the work that a person did for that info will never recognize by people.
However
, when Something threatens human life, people can understand how important is that news.
Moreover
, by publishing that news and awarding the
information
 that a person releases, the public can appreciate the work and time that person did.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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