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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advatantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many technologies have developed to be more comfortable for
people
,
some
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 modern technology we have never imagined that it has happened at present.
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 the future, all cars, buses and trucks will move by without a driver which inside consists of only passengers. From my point of view,
although
 it would be spectacular if there are no
drivers
 in the
vehicles
,
people
 in the cars would have some risks from the engine. On the one hand, one of the benefits of driverless
vehicles
 is reducing
car
accidents
. Nowadays, the news on television and newspaper
report
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 about
car
accidents
 almost every day, caused by
people
. To illustrate, most
accidents
 on the road happen from
people
 driving fast and over the limit, some
people
 do not have
discipline
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 to pass a traffic light
while
 it is red.
Moreover
, the top problem of
car
accidents
 accounted for drunk
drivers
 which the news usually reports every morning.
In addition
, falling asleep
also
 leads to
the
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problems on the road as well. Another benefit is that government can save the cost of hiring
population
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the population
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 as
drivers
, leading to investment in other parts
such
 as facilities and comprehensive transportation.
On the other hand
, the first obvious drawback of
vehicles
 without
drivers
 is that no one can help and support passengers on public transportation.
In other words
, the passengers might not be sure about the route they would go, so they cannot ask anyone. Plus, their bus cards could have an issue or the machine is not working to be tapped by the card so it would be better to have a driver as the same. The second drawback is
car
 machine problems.
For example
,
people
 will not know if the
car
 machine has troubles like breaking fail since they are focusing on other things not driving. Unemployment issues would be the final disadvantage. Many
people
 will be laid off from their jobs because of the
removing
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 driver position. To summarize, it seems to me that the advantages of driverless
vehicles
 are less than the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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