Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As
year
goes by, the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries not only in the big cities, but they are now can be seen in the village. Add an article
the year
As a
result
there are many local Add a comma
,result
business
which become unable to compete and Change to a plural noun
businesses
finally
out of Add a missing verb
are finally
business
. But, some people
think that the closure of local busniess
will bring about the death of local communities. I completely agree that the rapid Correct your spelling
businesses
developemnt
of supermarkets will bring out the death of Correct your spelling
development
local
Add an article
a local
the local
business
.
First and foremost, there are numerous reasons why Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
tend to chose buying at supermarket
than at the local Add an article
the supermarket
business
. Mainly it is because in
the Add the comma(s)
,in
supermarket
, they literally sell everything start from the
fruit to the snack, Correct article usage
apply
therefore
it is counted as an efficient way of shopping. For example
, people
who is
finding Change the verb form
are
its
hard to find Correct pronoun usage
it
a
free time for grocery shopping Correct article usage
apply
due to
their hectic busy work. They tend to chose
shopping at Change the verb
choose
Add an article
the supermarket
a supermarket
supermarket
which provide their Fix the agreement mistake
supermarkets
essential
which is Fix the agreement mistake
essentials
count
as efficient. Wrong verb form
counted
Moreover
, compared to local business
, the Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
supermarket
will provide to giving any doscount
for Correct your spelling
discount
discounts
a
Correct article usage
apply
people
who have their member
card, making the Replace the word
membership
people
will happily come again the next day.
Another potential reason why the local business
tend
to out of Correct subject-verb agreement
tends
business
after the supermarket
spotted
near their location is usually because of their staff. Add a missing verb
is spotted
For example
, the staff who is not very loyal to their boss in the local business
would feel that working at
the there become useless over time Change preposition
apply
due to
the salary at supermarket
Add an article
the supermarket
a supermarket
is
higher than at their working place which is Wrong verb form
being
local
Add an article
a local
business
.
In conclusion, i
agree that whenever the Change the capitalization
I
supermarket
is located near the
local Correct article usage
a
business
, the local business
has a very high chance to run out of business
due to
their competence in serve
Wrong verb form
serving
people
’s essential to their not loyal staff that will probably think to take a chance to work at supermarket
.Add an article
a supermarket
the supermarket
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