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Nowadays the way many people intereact with each other had changed because of technology. In what ways technology affected the types of relationship people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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 of the most controversial issues today relates to how
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 become widespread no
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 can live without it.
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, change our
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 completely.
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 affected our social
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.
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, not all the effects of
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 phenomenon have been positive,
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 there are certainly some advantages. On the
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 hand of view,
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 makes
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 convenient for
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. Specifically for
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 it changes the way of how to connect with others.
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 travelling far distances from your family and friends it is not a big deal like before. Because of many ,things you can call them every time you want and text them . ,
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 the video call makes our
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 easier.
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 good illustration of
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 I travelled for 3 months and when I was there I feel sometimes homesick but immediately I call my mom after that I became better
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 has impacted seriously
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 in a bad way.
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,
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 have not need to make
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 with others . The reason why they too much focus on their phone.
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 lack physical touch with
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.
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 let
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 think about superficiality and the value of the person for how they get followers on social media.
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 example of
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 is a magazine survey showing that 70 teenagers in Japan had suicide from bullying on social media. In conclusion, despite there is no doubt that
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 had changed our lives. It seems to me the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. It makes our
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 easier than before.
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, it makes
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last
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 longer
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