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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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This
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 graph depicts a percentage of the
population
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 in four countries for two different periods with a vision for 2030 and 2040. It is clear from the line chart that both of Philippines and Malaysia have the same
population
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with
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 about 30%.
According to
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 what is shown
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 has
a
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constant
growth
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 between 1970 and 1980, but between 1980 and 1990 there was a sharp
increase
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 of about 20%
more
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and after ,that there was varied
growth
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 until 2020 and in the
,
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future they will complete
growth
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.
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, there was a stable
increase
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 between 1970 and 1990, but after ,that there was constant
growth
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 to the end of the period.
Next,
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Thailand has a stable
increase
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 to 1990, after that there was a mostly stable percentage between 1990 and 2020, but it will complete an
increase
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 in their vision. ,
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Finally
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 there was a varied
population
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 in Indonesia but it was a complete
increase
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 to the
last
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.
To sum up
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, we could say that all the countries in the future will face
growth
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 in their
population
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 with a stable
increase
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, growth, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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