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It has been suggested that primary school children should be taught how to grow vegetables and keep animals. To what extent the advantages outweigh its disadvantages.

#school #children #vegetables #animals
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I am of the personal belief that the advantages of teaching
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 how to grow vegetables and keep
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 at primary
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 outweigh the disadvantages of not educating them at all, and
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 an opinion is largely based on the reasons elaborated below. Basically, I believe that primary
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children
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 should learn to do vegetable gardening and engage in animal care, which allows
children
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 to experience plant and animal care and nourish a responsible, consistent, and positive attitude towards hard work.
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, I suppose, can be best exemplified by the fact that in a study carried out by the University of Shahid Beheshti in the city of Tehran in 2007 on teaching primary
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children
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 vegetable gardening and animal interactions, it was seen that over 80% of the students got into the habit of caring for plants and
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 and gained a great sense of responsibility.
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, it has been said that primary
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children
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 should learn vegetable gardening and animal interactions, which reduce stress and anxiety and increase motivation and learning skills, and I cannot but agree with
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 an opinion, as best illustrated by an article in the Journal of Education in which it was stated that working out in the garden and playing with pets for just 30 minutes a day reduces the level of the stress hormone cortisol significantly in
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.
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, I would like
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 by saying that by teaching the importance of gardening from an early age of education, healthy eating will become a day-to-day habit, shaping the foundations of any young mind. Learning about empathy, relationships, the environment, and nature are the benefits that primary
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children
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 receive from caring for
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, based on the aforementioned argument, I must reiterate that I believe that primary
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children
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 should be taught how to grow vegetables and keep
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.
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