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It is believed that the education system is the most critical factor to the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this belief?

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 often thought that education is the base of a county’s growth . I somewhat agree with that statement. It has an influence on improvement but might not be the only
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 to develop.
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, schools universities and other teaching institutions provide people with knowledge that will be needed in their job. By allocating money for that, the country can expand its income
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 solving the problem of poverty and hunger.
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 possible to reduce unemployment either.
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, India started a new project on renovating the study system in the sixties. They have made a new conclusive exam and evaluation method, that was similar to
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 that had high literacy
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. That has shown dramatic progress in society and future income. Even though India is still poor and has a low economy, they overrun some other
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 with destitution. In my opinion, they’re in the
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 of advancement because of changes in the teaching scheme.
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 not an obligation to make education a priority. There are plenty of other things that show the critical impact on growth.
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,
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 that live in central Asia and in the middle east are rich in fossils. One of them is Kazakhstan which keeps its economy high through international trade.
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 country is not different in the complexity of literate resources and still keeps obsolete methods in pedagogy. Despite ,that
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 still one of the developing
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. To summarise the above, I agree that education is a crucial factor for social advancement and can be the reason for high progress, but
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 is not the only
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 to make it.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Critical factor
  • Economic growth
  • Innovation
  • Informed citizenry
  • Social mobility
  • Disadvantaged backgrounds
  • Social and economic status
  • Holistic approach
  • Technology adoption
  • Industrial development
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Democratic processes
  • Decision-making
  • Political stability
  • Infrastructure development
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