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Some people think that wearing a uniform at work is essential whereas others think that it is unnesessary. Present your views on both sides of argument

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Several people think that wearing a
uniform
 at
work
 is important
whereas
 others think that it is unnecessary. Both sides of
argument
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the argument
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is
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disscussed
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discussed
 below.
To begin
with
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 wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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 gives individuals recognition
to
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of
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 which company or firm
that
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apply
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they
work
 for , it gives a sense of uniformity
amoung
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among
workers
. There
wont
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won't
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 be internal competition between
workers
 to keep up with the
apperances
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appearances
 at
work
 , which can be stressful at times rather
workers
 can focus on some other important
job related
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 issues than worrying about fashion.Wearing uniforms
also
 saves money when one has
uniform
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a uniform
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 they
dont
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don't
 have to buy clothes for
work
therefore
 people can spend money
elsewhere
 on other important needs or want. Looking at the downside of wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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 is that it can become boring , one may get bored of the same old
uniform
 that they wear
everyday
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.
Workers
 should be given freedom for what they want to wear at
work
 as far as it is decent and formal , clothing
also
give
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 individuals self-confidence and high
self esteem
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self-esteem
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 which makes them feel good about themselves
therefore
 productivity can be increased at
workplace
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the workplace
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.
To conclude
 wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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 gives people recognition and
also
 helps in saving money and reducing competition with co-
workers
.
On the other
hand
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 wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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everyday
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every day
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 can become boring ,
workers
 should be given
freedom
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the freedom
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 to wear what they desire.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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