As science and technology contribute most to the development of society, science students should get more financial support from government than students in other fields (eg. business, language, etc.). To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In our modern world, undoubtedly, all the innovations are mainly because of the researchers.

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, learners should be encouraged to study in the fields related to tech and science by providing them scholarships from the government,

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, other courses do not hold the same importance. Analysing I believe it is not completely true and other subjects are equally important for the success of society.

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with, one of the main reasons I disagree with the notion is that courses like finance, arts, history, law etc. reflect the

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of the students.

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, alluring them with financial aid specifically for the ones who are not able to pay their school fees could be misleading them, eventually, they might not be able to become a good doctor or engineer in future as they might not be able to focus. In my experience, I always wanted to become an artist but my father wanted me to

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engineering in my higher studies, I accepted his choice and failed twice during my semesters. Certainly, learning something that does not interest one can be an obstacle in their future career.

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, technology and sciences are not the only sectors that lead to the development of society.

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, people will not be able to file their taxes if there is no accountant, and no sculpture and art pieces if we stop the young

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, every single subject has been chosen wisely by the people over the years to accommodate all the necessary aspects of society which cannot be neglected

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medical and non-medical studies.

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, if public authorities decide to provide finances to the young ones to study

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it should be equally divided among all the sectors irrespective of one single course which will be unfair to all adolescents. In conclusion, with the growing popularity of sectors related to sciences, it is suggested to be funded by the government in order to enrol more learners in it. I completely disagree with

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idea as every field plays a vital role in developing the country.

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