Crime rates will fall as advances in technology make it easier to detect and prevent crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#crime #rates #fall #advances #technology #crimes

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

It is undeniable in

this

Linking Words

modern era,

technology

Use synonyms

improves time by time. I agree with the statement that some advantages can make some advancements including security that can detect and prevent crimes. The following paragraph will explore and provide examples. On the

hand

Correct word choice

other hand

show examples

technology

Use synonyms

can be an easy way to improve security.

For example

Linking Words

, some houses put cameras as an “eye” that has abilities to watch, to record cord every activity and movement.

In addition

Linking Words

, it is

Rephrase

apply

show examples

useful for the officer especially the police,

such

Linking Words

as various cases that can be solved by looking at

this

Linking Words

recording.

Besides

Linking Words

that,

technology

Use synonyms

can protect us from bad people when they want to

Verb problem

have

show examples

negative desires.

For instance

Linking Words

, lots of companies in the automotive sector give an alarm if someone who is not its owner tries to steal the car by making a

huge

Correct word choice

loud

show examples

sound and sending a notification to the owner's smartphone.

As a result

Linking Words

, the number of cases of crime will go down.

On the other hand

Linking Words

, the

technology

Use synonyms

’s improvement can

also

Linking Words

be a problem because ,in recent years, offenders

try

Wrong verb form

have tried

show examples

to use it to get advantages. As an illustration, In Indonesia, there are so many scamming cases by taking people’s money in their bank account through an application or

massage

Correct your spelling

message

show examples

that has been sent to the victims’ phones. But in fact,

this

Linking Words

can be tackled with security awareness or even not clicking every link in a

massage

Correct your spelling

message

show examples

Last

Linking Words

but not least, do not share and keep our private username, password or even general information to everyone. In conclusion, I believe that the improvement of

technology

Use synonyms

has more advantages than

its

Correct pronoun usage

apply

show examples

drawbacks because it can be used as a tool to protect or prevent us from crimes.

Submitted by donihabiburrahman8 on Mon Jun 19 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supporting details to maintain logical structure.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are present, but they could be strengthened to better frame the essay.

task achievement

Provide more in-depth analysis and development of ideas to fully address the task prompt.

10
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

287 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

crime deterrent
high-tech surveillance
facial recognition systems
omnipresence
deter
digital forensics
ballistic testing
revolutionize
exonerate
root causes
social inequality
invasion of privacy
civil liberties
surveillance
data collection
negative implications
cybercrime
hacking
identity theft
online fraud
cybersecurity
vulnerabilities
exploit

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5
band
: Some people say that traffic accidents are caused by the increasing number of motorbikes. Other blame for man’s fault. Which point of view do you agree ?
In recent years, traffic accidents have been a noticeable problem not only in Vietnam but also throughout the world. While a school of thought holds that the rise in the number of motorbikes is a major reason, others still believe that what directly results in this alarming trend is human errors. From my perspective, although the upward trend of motorbikes consumption do lead to this issue, man's misbehaviors remain the core of this trend.
4.5
band
Environmental problems are increasing in developing countries. what are some possible solutions for this issue
Many developing countries have faced air and water pollution because of industry and construction. Using solar and wild energy and taking some steps to improve air quality through filtrations could be optimal solutions for this issue.
<4
band
Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society?
The world right now wants the sciences today more than ever, because the envierment needs and the pupllution setiuations and the disesses which afact on on people health.So must the goverment serache for the reasons why the students did not aplied for that importnat sectione not like before?
7
band
Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?
It is often suggested that more prosperous countries should support deprived nations with humanitarian aid during catastrophic natural disasters. This essay agrees with the statement because it is natural to help others in a difficult position and richer country's financial levels will not affected by International service.
6
band
In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.
This day, the longevity of residents is increasing in several countries and leads to overpopulation. However, some people think that having an elderly population has more benefits than negative effects. In my opinion, I think that such a claim is correct to a certain extent.

Crime rates will fall as advances in technology make it easier to detect and prevent crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

: Some people say that traffic accidents are caused by the increasing number of motorbikes. Other blame for man’s fault. Which point of view do you agree ?

Environmental problems are increasing in developing countries. what are some possible solutions for this issue

Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society?

Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.