Write about the following topic. Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Dressing
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is considered
as
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one of the most common
ettiquette
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etiquette
in
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the coporate
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coporate
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corporate
world . Some companies
gives
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give
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emphasis on dress
while
others prefer
work
over dressing .
This
essay will discuss both
the
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apply
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views
Employees
who
work
from
office
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the office
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always needed to follow specific dress
code
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codes
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like formal
attires
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attire
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.
This
is acceptable because
its
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it
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creates a
responsibilty
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responsibility
among
employees
and create a
work
environment . People cannot attend meetings in informal wear.
Apart from
this
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,this
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some areas like
fashion
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the fashion
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industry,
frontdesk
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front desk
and airlines require dressing formally as they need to classify
position
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the position
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of workers
also
.
For
example
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,example
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Air
hostess
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hostesses
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are expected to appear at
work
while
dressing
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in airplane
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airplane
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aeroplane
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uniform and with makeup and
next
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,next
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they see serving the
employees
. On
other
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the other
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hand
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,hand
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there are companies that prefer
work
more than
apperarance
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appearance
.
This
more
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is more
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applicable to startups and unicorns where there will be less number of people and
goal
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the goal
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is to create their market
instead
of focusing on
employees
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employees'
employee's
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dresscodes
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dress codes
. They will
also
attend
in
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apply
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formals
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formal
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for
any
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apply
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client meetings. In conclusion ,
This
dressing culture totally depends on
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the employers
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employers
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employers'
employer's
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perspective ,
likewise
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,likewise
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employees
should look
prensentable
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presentable
.
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