Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others fell that having a balanced diet it's more important.

It is widely argued that
exercises
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is
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more useful for
health
,
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others opine that
balanced
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diet
is better.
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while
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activities
key
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to
health
,
well balanced
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diet
is good. On the one
hand
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there are useful and important exercises. Because if you
training
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often it will start to affect your body parts.
As a result
, it will
also
have a positive effect on your
health
.
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, my dad does run every day and
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helping
his
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to lose weight. Another better side of working out is for your muscles. Especially
this
is observed among many
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young muscles
have
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grown during these exercises. The result, young
people
want to go to fitness clubs when they see each other changing like
this
.
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, fitness clubs located in the city
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are always full of
people
.
In addition
, they are
also
working hard at home, and these processes have a positive effect on their
health
.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that
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diet
balance is very useful
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health
.
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of
people
who
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healthy food
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happy and they are in luck.
This
reason is that every day
people
cook healthy food, buying fresh vegetables.
Moreover
, they can reduce their different diseases. They
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will visit the doctor less often. Another profits
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diet
to
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lifestyle changes because if everyone eats on time and in order there will be no
health
problems.
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, though training
sports
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more
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useful, I think that
good
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balance
diet
is
a
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well for everyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Metabolism
  • Chronic diseases
  • Immune system
  • Mental well-being
  • Nutrients
  • Malnutrition
  • Obesity
  • Type 2 diabetes
  • Circulation
  • Nutrient distribution
  • Preventive health
  • Energy levels
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
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