The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.
This
bar chart depicts the
ratio
of
people
going to
cinemas
on days of the week in one Europe country. It is clear from the graph that, Saturday had the highest percentage of
people
who are going to
cinemas
of all time.
According to
what is shown, on Monday the
ratio
of
people
who went to
cinemas
was 2% in 2003. After
that
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the number increased nearly by 4
percent
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to reach 14% in 2005 . And as for
2007
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the percentage decreased to represent approximately 12 per cent . On Wednesday the figure
of
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people
who went to
cinemas
was about 15% but it dropped gradually between 2003 and 2007 to reach 8%.
On the other hand
, on Friday the number consisted the same from 2003 to 2007,
whereas
on Saturday the
ratio
was 40% in 2003 but it soared nearly 5 percent to
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for 45% in 2005. After that, the percentage dipped to 42% in 2007.
To sum up
, we could say on Friday, Saturday and Sunday the
ratio
was
as
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it
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its
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highest compared to the rest of the weekdays.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ratio, people, cinemas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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