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Write about the following topic: More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Every now and
then
, the community is always seeking good living conditions and more opportunities. Despite of difficulty that
people
 might face, they tend to move to the cities. In the following ,paragraphs I will illustrate some of the hardness
due to
 living in the
city
, and explain how the government could make it better for urban
life
. First of all, It is quite hard for individuals to quit their hometown and move to a completely strange area. One of the crucial reasons is the lack of opportunities which I summarize in jobs, studies and entertainment.
Secondly
, Urban
life
 is so simple ,especially for young
people
. They choose to move to the
city
 in which
life
 is more exciting and where they could pursue their dreams.
however
,
life
 in a
city
 is not heaven. At
first,
people
 travel with excitement imagining their job and their accommodations to be perfect and easy to find. In all,
besides
 the difficulty of finding a job and ,rent they
also
 risk being homesick and that may lead to serious illnesses. In order to prevent
such
 undesirable movements, the government should act for the benefit of urban
life
.
First,
building good schools and providing universities with good professors in different domains. Again, entertainment is really important for the young population to relax and regain their strength.
Then
, facilitate their travelling by building good roads and providing means of transportation
as well as
 job opportunities and shops.
To conclude
, urban
life
 is so beautiful and simple. though, young
people
 are looking for excitement and adventure in spite of the risk.
Life
 in the
city
 may be exciting and encouraging but it has always been difficult even for those who were born and raised in it. As far as I am concerned, I would rather live in the countryside to live in the
city
.
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