Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

A growing number of
people
are adopting modern technology to socialise.
however
,there are predominantly two contrasting views. Where a section of society claims that the use of the
internet
has brought
people
together.
While
others emphasize that
people
and communities have become more isolated than before.I personally believe that advancement in technology surely brings
people
closer. On the one side, advocates of
this
believe that today's sedentary life means no time for a social life.In
this
case, the
internet
would be a lifesaver for those who
lives
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far away from their families and who work with
hectic
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schedule.
For instance
,with the help of
Internet
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and social media namely Whatsapp,Instagram, Facebook and
list
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is endless.one can connect with their dear ones any time anywhere.
secondly
,
due to
the widespread of social networking
websites
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people
get familiar
around
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the globe. They are sharing information and
make
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friends.
Thirdly
,modern ways of interacting allow
people
to know and be well-informed about the world and current affairs.
In addition
, the world has become a multicultural society and credit goes to
Internet
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. On the other side,
this
development may have drawbacks too.chiefly, it is hard to get
along with
new technical equipment .especially, for senior citizens ,
for example
, they don't know how to use it.
As a result
,they often lose connections and feel isolated.
similarly
, if they learn it anyhow,it would not give any surety that they won't feel left out.because they believe traditional methods
such
ad talking and meeting in person is better than any platform. In my opinion, the
internet
has brought myriad of advantages to society,it made our life easy in terms of the transmission of ideas and thoughts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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