The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pie.
The charts show the process of producing the frozen
fish
pie. Use synonyms
Overall
, one Linking Words
fish
pie comes in a container that can be reheated in the microwave. It contains Use synonyms
fish
, potato, peas and sauce. The process is Use synonyms
splitted
into 2 ports: potato and Correct your spelling
split
fish
.
Potatoes that have been harvested are transported by truck to Use synonyms
dean
within 30 days. Correct your spelling
Dean
Next,
the skin is peeled off and Linking Words
is
disposed of as waste. They are sliced, boiled, chilled and stored for the next step.
For Unnecessary verb
apply
salmon
, the Use synonyms
salmon
is delivered within 12 hours to the factory. Lemon juice and salt Use synonyms
is
added. Change the verb form
are
Next,
it is steamed in the oven. After that, the staff takes the skin and bones Linking Words
as
Change preposition
for
the
waste disposal. After, the skin and bones are removed. The inspector will check before preparing the peas and sauce with potato. Correct article usage
apply
Finally
, the Linking Words
salmon
and potatoes are wrapped, and the Use synonyms
salmon
is frozen for storing and dispatching.Use synonyms
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