The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pie.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pie.
The charts show the process of producing the frozen
fish
pie.
Overall
, one
fish
pie comes in a container that can be reheated in the microwave. It contains
fish
, potato, peas and sauce. The process is
splitted
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into 2 ports: potato and
fish
. Potatoes that have been harvested are transported by truck to
dean
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Dean
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within 30 days.
Next,
the skin is peeled off and
is
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disposed of as waste. They are sliced, boiled, chilled and stored for the next step. For
salmon
, the
salmon
is delivered within 12 hours to the factory. Lemon juice and salt
is
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are
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added.
Next,
it is steamed in the oven. After that, the staff takes the skin and bones
as
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the
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waste disposal. After, the skin and bones are removed. The inspector will check before preparing the peas and sauce with potato.
Finally
, the
salmon
and potatoes are wrapped, and the
salmon
is frozen for storing and dispatching.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, salmon with synonyms.
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