You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map shows Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The given map illustrates information about
comparison
of Correct article usage
the comparison
present
and future of Southside shopping mall.
Correct article usage
the present
In
Change preposition
Overall
overall
, this
shopping center
will expand Change the spelling
centre
as
size in planned development, Change preposition
in
as a result
, there are some places will
Correct pronoun usage
that will
be vanished
.
It is crystal clear that between these two pictures, we can see many additional buildings. Change to the active voice
vanish
have vanished
To begin
with, there is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
lot
of shops Change the article
a lot
such
as,
fashion Remove the comma
apply
clothings
, Change the wording
clothing
items of clothing
articles of clothing
footwears
and beauty products Fix the agreement mistake
footwear
will
be built in future development. In the second place, another entrance is added to Correct pronoun usage
that will
department
store. Add an article
the department
a department
Lastly
, car
park which locates in Correct article usage
the car
south
is expanded and occupied all of Add an article
the south
south
side.
Add an article
the south
On the other hand
, some properties are disappeared in
the plan, Change preposition
from
for instance
, noodle shop
, movie Fix the agreement mistake
shops
theaters
and playing Change the spelling
theatres
area
. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Moreover
, outside of Southside, there was a golf a
course and park but in Correct article usage
apply
plan
, it will be changed to Add an article
the plan
a plan
shopping
mall. In relation to the size of Add an article
the shopping
a shopping
shopping
mall, Add an article
a shopping
the shopping
cafe
is replaced by Add an article
the cafe
info
Correct article usage
an info
center
. Change the spelling
centre
Finally
Add a comma
,Finally
supermarket
and Fix the agreement mistake
supermarkets
restroom
remain unchanged.Fix the agreement mistake
restrooms
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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