You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map shows Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map shows Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The given map illustrates information about
comparison
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the comparison
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of
present
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the present
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and future of Southside shopping mall.
In
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Overall
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overall
,
this
shopping
center
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centre
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will expand
as
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in
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size in planned development,
as a result
, there are some places
will
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that will
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be vanished
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vanish
have vanished
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. It is crystal clear that between these two pictures, we can see many additional buildings.
To begin
with, there
is
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are
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lot
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a lot
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of shops
such
as
,
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apply
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fashion
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
articles of clothing
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,
footwears
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footwear
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and beauty products
will
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that will
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be built in future development. In the second place, another entrance is added to
department
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the department
a department
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store.
Lastly
,
car
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the car
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park which locates in
south
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the south
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is expanded and occupied all of
south
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the south
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side.
On the other hand
, some properties are disappeared
in
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from
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the plan,
for instance
, noodle
shop
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shops
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, movie
theaters
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theatres
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and playing
area
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areas
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.
Moreover
, outside of Southside, there was a golf
a
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apply
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course and park but in
plan
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the plan
a plan
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, it will be changed to
shopping
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the shopping
a shopping
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mall. In relation to the size of
shopping
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a shopping
the shopping
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mall,
cafe
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the cafe
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is replaced by
info
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an info
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center
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centre
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.
Finally
Add a comma
,Finally
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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and
restroom
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restrooms
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remain unchanged.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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