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the diagram belows shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years

the diagram belows shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years
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These diagrams depict a floor plan for a public library now and
before
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20 years. It is clear from the maps that they removed the tables and the chairs from the centre of the floor.
According to
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 what is shown they replaced the adult fiction books to be in the same area for the non-fiction in front of the information desk.
Next,
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they added a children’s
room
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 with storytelling events with two sofas on the left and the right corner.
Moreover
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, they replaced the tickets zone to share the same place
with
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 the information desk, and they built a café on the left side of the entry. ,
,
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Finally
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 they added a new lecture
room
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 and cancelled the video games
room
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 to be just a computer
room
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To sum up
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, we could say that all the rooms in the building had changed, and there were some services cancelled in the new plan.
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