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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets.Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

It is said that the authorities spend a considerable amount of
money
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 in order to find alternative planets. Some individuals believe that
the
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governments should allocate funding for public services rather than support
space
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researches
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research
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. I totally agree with the statement, In my opinion
the
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lawmakers should focus to tackle the issues of
people
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instead
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 of wasting
money
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 on
space
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 programs .
To begin
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 with, there are several reasons why I believe
the
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that
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 funding
space
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projects
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 is wasting
money
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.
Firstly
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,
space
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projects
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 do not provide vital services for normal
people
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.
This
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 is because these
projects
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 usually serve the companies to make
proifits
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profits
 rather
ordinary
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than ordinary
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people
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 .
Therefore
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 ,
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government
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the government
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 should spend these funds
in
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on
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 crucial infrastructure namely, healthcare,
eduction
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education
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,
public
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and public
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 transport, which these
projects
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 can increase
standards
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the standards
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 of living for
people
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.
Furthermore
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, In
future
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,future
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 we will expect to face
shortage
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a shortage
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in
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of
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 water and
then
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 the
government
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 should spend these funds to build
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a desalinations
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desalinations
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desalination
 power plant in order to increase the amount of fresh water and make it
accessiable
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accessible
for
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to
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 all
people
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.
Secondly
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,
the
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global warming and climate change
is represent
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represent
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 the biggest threat to
the
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life
in
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on
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the
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earth, which means
government
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 should spend
these
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this money
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money
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 to support
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly
projects
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.
For example
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,
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the
government
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 can support
build
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building
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 solar , wind,
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and
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power plants in order to mitigate these issues and provide clean energy .
Moreover
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,
send
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sending
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spaccrafts
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spacecraft
to outer
space
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 will increase
the
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Co2 emissions
can
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and can
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 contribute to air pollution.
To sum up
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, I strongly believe that authorities should spend
money
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 to
tackele
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tackle
 critical issues for
public
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the public
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 namely ,
improve
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improving
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 the infrastructure, lack of fresh water, climate change and global warming
instead
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 of
waste
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wasting
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 the
money
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 of taxpayers in
space
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 programs.

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