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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets.Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

#government #money #life #planets #people
It is said that the authorities spend a considerable amount of
money
 in order to find alternative planets. Some individuals believe that
the
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governments should allocate funding for public services rather than support
space
researches
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research
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. I totally agree with the statement, In my opinion
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lawmakers should focus to tackle the issues of
people
instead
 of wasting
money
 on
space
 programs .
To begin
 with, there are several reasons why I believe
the
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that
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 funding
space
projects
 is wasting
money
.
Firstly
,
space
projects
 do not provide vital services for normal
people
.
This
 is because these
projects
 usually serve the companies to make
proifits
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profits
 rather
ordinary
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than ordinary
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people
 .
Therefore
 ,
government
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the government
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 should spend these funds
in
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on
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 crucial infrastructure namely, healthcare,
eduction
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education
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,
public
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and public
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 transport, which these
projects
 can increase
standards
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the standards
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 of living for
people
.
Furthermore
, In
future
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,future
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 we will expect to face
shortage
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a shortage
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in
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of
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 water and
then
 the
government
 should spend these funds to build
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a desalinations
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desalinations
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desalination
 power plant in order to increase the amount of fresh water and make it
accessiable
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accessible
for
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to
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 all
people
.
Secondly
,
the
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global warming and climate change
is represent
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represent
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 the biggest threat to
the
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life
in
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on
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the
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earth, which means
government
 should spend
these
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this money
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money
 to support
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly
projects
.
For example
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,
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the
government
 can support
build
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building
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 solar , wind,
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and
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power plants in order to mitigate these issues and provide clean energy .
Moreover
,
send
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sending
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spaccrafts
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spacecraft
to outer
space
 will increase
the
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Co2 emissions
can
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and can
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 contribute to air pollution.
To sum up
, I strongly believe that authorities should spend
money
 to
tackele
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tackle
 critical issues for
public
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the public
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 namely ,
improve
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improving
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 the infrastructure, lack of fresh water, climate change and global warming
instead
 of
waste
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wasting
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 the
money
 of taxpayers in
space
 programs.
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