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Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative impact both on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I am of the personal belief that web-based social networks should not have a negative impact on individuals and society, and
such
 an opinion is largely based on the reasons elaborated below. Basically, I believe that social networking sites are a faster and more efficient way of communicating than traditional methods, which help
people
 keep in touch with friends and family by sharing photos, and videos, and using various applications rather than writing a letter.
This
, I suppose, can be best exemplified by a study carried out by the University of Shahid Beheshti in the city of Tehran in 2007 on university students, in which it was seen that social
media
 applications
such
 as LinkedIn, Facebook, and Instagram have revolutionised communication in that the online social
media
 make spoken and written communication between
people
 possible anytime and anywhere without confining them to only geographical boundaries. Whatsmore it has been said that social
media
 provides a platform for businesses to connect with their target audience, engage with customers, improve their marketing, and reduce advertising costs, which
consequently
 helps businesses grow. I cannot but agree with
such
 an opinion, as best illustrated by an article written in the Journal of Wireless Network and Business in which it was stated that social
media
 data serves as an indicator of a company's current brand awareness and causes effectiveness in not only company sales but a brand loyalty.
Finally
, I would like
to conclude
 by saying that online social
media
 has a positive impact on the number of job opportunities that are in high demand, and
people
 already work full-time on social
media
.
For instance
, as in the case of the social
media
 industry, constantly needs bright, motivated programmers and developers with fresh ideas and perspectives. Another example that can be illustrated is that it seems like nowadays, 59% of
people
 go by the job title "blogger" than ever before. Based on the aforementioned argument, I must reiterate that I believe that web-based social networks should not have a negative impact on individuals and society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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