The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
This
pie chart depicts the daily proportion of different kinds of nutrients, in the consumption of
the average person in Change preposition
by
USA
in each Correct article usage
the USA
sorts
of Change to a singular noun
sort
meals
and Fix the agreement mistake
meal
snacks
. It is clear from the graph that, the highest consumption is at the Fix the agreement mistake
snack
dinner
in all of the categories except added sugar
. According to
what is shown, sodium
and saturated fat have a similar percentage
at dinner
accounting for 43% and 37% respectively. While
in the added sugar
the percentage
is 23% at dinner
. As for snacks
, the
added Correct article usage
apply
sugar
has the highest proportion at
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of
the
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snacks
representing 42%. Whereas
, both sodium
and saturated fat have a tiny difference in their figure accounting for 14% and 21% at snacks
respectively. On the other hand
, in
saturated fat and Change preposition
apply
sodium
have the same number at breakfast comprises of
16%. As for added Wrong verb form
comprising
sugar
. there is also
a minor difference between the number of both
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apply
sodium
, saturated fat, and added sugar
by about 2% to represents
14% at breakfast. And Wrong verb form
represent
finally
we have about the same Add a comma
finally,
percentage
in
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of
sodium
and saturated fat by
26% and 29% respectively at lunch. And in added Change preposition
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sugar
the number is 19% at lunch. Add a comma
sugar,
To sum up
, we could say that at
both Change preposition
apply
dinner
and snacks
has
the highest Correct subject-verb agreement
have
percentage
compared to the rest categories.Submitted by asem2017asem2017 on
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