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Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environment problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and vehicles. Do you agree or disagree.

#people #environment #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
Environment is the basic necessity for humans to live in
this
 world. Few mankind realize that one of
better
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the better
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way
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ways
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 to resolve environmental
issues
 by
rise
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raise
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 the
cost
 of
fuel
 for
cars
,
vehicles
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and vehicles
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.
By
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Increasing
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increase
 the
cost
 of
fuel
 for
cars
 and
vehicles
 it’s not
better
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a better
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 way to deal with
the
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apply
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environmental
issues
,
cost
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the cost
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 of
fuel
 rises will affect
the
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apply
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mankind in different ways.
Fuel
 is the basic necessity to run automobiles, as
cost
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the cost
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 rises of
fuel
 it
effects
 directly basic needs like food,
transportation
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and transportation
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. Environmental
issues
 cannot be resolved by increasing
price
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the price
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 of
fuel
 for automobiles as I disagree with
this
 statement, in my point of view
to
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use electric
cars
 as
it
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they
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 take less amount of
fuel
for running
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to run
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 process as these electric
cars
 once charged
so
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apply
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it
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apply
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runs
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run
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 many kilometers easily without again consumption of
fuel
 requires. The
disadvantages
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disadvantage
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 of increasing
fuel
cost
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costs
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 to save
environment
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the environment
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, as inflation increases because everything
transports
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is transported
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 to shops and superstores from
warehouse
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the warehouse
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 so
cost
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the cost
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 of products will
increase
. Another disadvantage,
people
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is people
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 travel
through
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in
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 different automobiles to offices as
increase
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the increase
an increase
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of
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in
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fuel
cost
 will
effect
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affect
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 the income of employees it
get
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gets
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 tough for them to bare
expenses
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the expenses
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 of their daily life.
However
,
in other
words
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words,
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 reasons for not increasing
cost
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the cost
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 of
fuel
firstly
 as it
effects
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affects
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 the economy of
country
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the country
a country
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 as inflation arises people spend less amount to buy products for their daily usage like
grocery
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groceries
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 and other basic needs.
Secondly
, it
effects
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affects
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 the tourism of
country
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the country
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with as
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as
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a
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 higher
cost
 of
fuel
 so
tourists
 will
didn’t
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not
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 come to visit the
country
so
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and
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 no revenue
generated
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is generated
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 through
tourism
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the tourism
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 sector.
For instance
, I share the example regarding
country
 Srilanka is famous for
exotic
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its exotic
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 beach resorts and diverse landscapes. They
increases
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increase
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cost
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the cost
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 of
fuel
 to save environmental
issues
as
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apply
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not their tourism dept. work in
effective
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an effective
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 manner
as a result
tourists
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tourists'
tourist's
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visit
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visits
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 to
country
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the country
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declines
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decline
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 as it
effects
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apply
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directly economy of
country
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the country
a country
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.
To conclude
that
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apply
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,
its
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it's
it is
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 not
better
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a better
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 way to
increase
 the
cost
 of
fuel
 to save environmental
issues
 as it
effects
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apply
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directly the economy
as
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apply
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in my point of view
use
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using
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 electric
vehicles
which
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apply
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helps in limited use of
fuel
instead
 of
fuel
 consumption
vehicles
requires
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require
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 more
fuel
 for transportation.
Tourists
 visit to that
country
 where
cost
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the cost
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 of
fuel
 increases
as
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apply
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it
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which
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effects
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affects
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 the pocket of
tourists
 as they have to spend more
due to
 inflation arises in the
country
.
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