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Nowadays people prefer to shop in large supermarkets rather than nearby local shops, why do you think this is happening?is this a positive or negative trend

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In today's society, buying accessories and kinds of stuff from large supermarkets is getting more popular rather than from the local shop. In order to examine both sides of
this
 contentious issue, I will
also
 offer my own perspective in the following paragraph paragraphs. First of all,
this
 trend will result in the developed cities and
people
 are becoming familiar with shopping in the large mall. As a good point,
people
 can arrange their required items in one place without going to any other places.
As a result
,
people
 who are in a hurry can pick up and purchase easily without doing a bargain as we do in the nearby local shops.
In addition
,
Secondly
,
people
 can check the price before they buy something.families with many children do not need to worry from lost the way because parents may leave for a little
while
 in the playground. Every positive value has its price in negative terms. Sometimes
people
 may deviate from the purpose of shopping for items because
people
 may be confused many times.
This
 can lead to additional charges that do not necessary for more than one time.
Additionally
, the products may be higher than in the other small markets because of additional taxes.
Furthermore
, parents might not control their children by urging them to buy dolls, toys and some accessories when the supermarkets do not possess playgrounds. It does not sure to get organic groceries like we used to do in local shops.
To sum up
,
people
 should think about the benefits and cons of both options and select the strategy that best suits their purpose.
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